2005/06/13 | thanks for Mandy's help
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Yesterday afternoon,one of my friends came to see me,we communicated with ours minds.In fact we have not met together for a long time.she was my old colleague two years ago, when we were talking, I was very confused about our opinions. Maybe we are working and living in different environment.
Later we went to have a dinner,during this time, I adviced that she should study hard and do what she want to.

In fact I don't know how to improve my writing level,Only what I can do is read more.So, sometimes I feel discouragement and how to express my thoughts in english


correction:
Yesterday afternoon, one of my friends came to see me, we communicated with ours minds (I'm not so sure what you wanted to express, i would have used "talked in depth"). In fact we have ("had", past perfect tense. because you already met yesterday, so before yesterday, it's a time span in the past of past) not met together (delete this word, it's repetitive) for a long time. she was my old colleague two years ago, when we were talking, I was very confused about our opinions. Maybe we are working and living in different environments.
Later we went to have a dinner, during this time, I adviced (advised, i'd use "suggested", because after "suggest", subjunctive tense is required) that she should study hard and do what she wants to.

In fact I don't know how to improve my writing level, Only what I can do is read more. So, sometimes I feel discouragement (discouraged) and don't know how to express my thoughts in english



1. Pls, remember to add a space after each comma (,), period (.), etc.
2. You can express your thoughts, it's just you don't have enough words and structures to carry them. That's why you need to read more, recite more, and read loud more. When I learn, I have to "borrow" others' works too, but when I learned them by heart, them became mine. You need this exercise too!
3. When you write, try to use simple sentenses. In daily life, people don't use compound sentences a lot, learn the essential words, and grasp their usage, that will help greatly.
4. Be attentive, when you see and read, try to learn with your heart and not just your eyes and ears. We can learn from even simplest articles.
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