2005/06/21 | The importance of Being kind and Polite
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Last Saturday, I studied a text very carefully. I wrote summary for this text. Please help me correct it as you have spare time, thanks for your help.

The importance of Being kind and Polite
"Frankly, I think your boring." I think we can not say so honestly unless you want to end a relationship in our daily life. For instance, failing asleep when someone is making a lecture, yawning when friends show their collection of stamps. And so on, all these are not good manners.
We should act in a civilized way to avoid misunderstanding, friction and conflict. We can't interact with others without some social rules of behavior. These rules reprent that what most of people consider acceptable and what the consider unacceptable. But some people especially many young people whose behavior is generally unacceptable. They talk louder when the teacher is teaching them… … In a word, behave ourselves in public places.
In fact, we should show expect with each other. Good manners can help us succeed in our career. Those who haven't manners will pay the price sooner or later.


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Last Saturday, I studied a text very carefully. I wrote summary for this text. Please help me correct it if/when (as=既然, if=如果, when=当……时候) you have spare time, thanks for your help.

The importance of Being kind and Polite
"Frankly, I think you (not your) boring." I think we can not say so honestly unless you want to end a relationship in our daily life. For instance, falling (not failing) asleep when someone is making a lecture, yawning when friends show their collection of stamps. And so on, all these are not good manners.
We should act in a civilized way to avoid misunderstanding, friction and conflict. We can't interact with others without some social rules of behavior. These rules represent (not reprent) what (not that what) most of people consider acceptable and what they consider unacceptable. But some people, especially many young people, their (not whose, because otherwise this is not a complete sentence, it lacked verb) behaviors are generally unacceptable. They talk loud when the teacher is teaching them… … In a word, behave ourselves in public places. In fact, we should show respect (not expect) to (not with) each other. Good manners can help us succeed in our career. Those who haven't manners will pay the price sooner or later.

I must say, it's very well done! But you need to pay more attention to spelling, because you misspelt words that you shouldn't mistake.
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