2005/06/23 | I felt very sorry
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Today, I make much more mistakes,I know I can not pay attention to tense, how can I do?

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Yesterday, my classmate named Beibei came to see me. I have not met her for a long time. Our major is nutritional science. We have graduated for five years.We have only sixteen classmates in our class, most of us are girls.
We had been chatting until she was off duty in our office. We talked about work, life, studying since we hadn't met.
I wouldn't like nutritional science at all, though this major is very interesting. After I had graduated from school, I entered into a big food company and worked for three years. At last, I can not bear that complex atmosphere and quitted my job.
Up to now, I have changed fours jobs. Now I am office worker in trade company. She also has done several works, at present she works well as a sales.
When we refered to our expect towards future, I didn't show my plan to her. My Boy Friend is not together with me, I will not tell her about this until I leave this city to the place where my BF live in next year.
In fact she is my best classmate. Sometimes I am very lazy and not to contact with her. Her work is much busier than mine.

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Yesterday, my classmate named Beibei came to see me. I had not met (you met her yesterday, it's already "past", before meeting her, you hadn't seen each other for a while, so it's "past of past", then you need to use past perfect tense) her for a long time. Our major is nutrition science (why not "nutritional science"? because this "nutrition" is to determine the branch of the science, not modify the science to mean that this science is "nutritional"). We graduated five years ago (better use past tense, because the action of "graduation" can't last five yrs).We had only sixteen classmates in our class, most of us were girls. (this 2 verbs have the same problem, the tense was wrong.)
We had been chatting till (better to use "till", since this is an affirmative sentence, usually "until" is used with "not" to form "not ... until" structure) she was off duty in our office. We talked about work, life, studying since we met last time (after "since" as "从……时候起", past tense is required, not past perfect tense).
I don't (if you still don't like it, use present tense) like nutrition science at all, though this major is very interesting. After I graduated from school (when you refer to a point of time, use always "past tense"), I entered into a big food company and worked for three years. At last, I could (in the past) not bear that complex atmosphere and quitted my job.
Up to now, I have changed fours jobs. Now I am office worker in a trade company. She also has done several works, at present she works well as a saleswoman (or "salesperson", we can say "she works in the sales", but while referring the job title, it's "salesman", etc.).
When we refered to our expectations (here you need a noun) towards future, I didn't show my plan to her. My boyfriend (this is one word now) is not together with me, I will not tell her about this until next year I leave this city to where my BF lives .
In fact she was (in college she was ..., now you have other classmates) my best classmate. Sometimes I am very lazy and not contact her (contact + sb., don't need to add preposition). Her work is much busier than mine


Yesterday, my classmate named Beibei came to see me. I have not met her for a long time. Our major is nutritional science. We graduated five years ago .We have only sixteen classmates in our class. Most of us are girls.
We had been chatting until she was off duty in our office. We talked about work, life and studying since we hadn't met.
I wouldn't like nutritional science at all, though this major is very interesting. After I graduated from school, I entered into a big food company and worked for three years. At last, I could not bear that complex atmosphere and quit my job.
Up to now, I have changed jobs four times. Now I am an office worker in a trade company. She also has done several jobs. At present she works well as a salesperson.
When we referred to our expectations towards the future, I didn't show my plan to her. My boyfriend is not together with me. I will not tell her about this until I leave this city to the place where my BF lives in the next year.
In fact she is my best classmate. Sometimes I am very lazy and do not contact her. Her work is much busier than mine.
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