2005/07/20 | One-child-only Policy
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Nowadays, china practices" One child only policy". Do you think it's an ideal family structure?
I think it is not an ideal family structure. In my opinion, it is an ideal family structure that the family should have two children.
Nowadays, most of the kids are only children, so the parents dote on their kid very much and try their best to provide him with well-life. Meanwhile, the parents show their expection on their child and hope for one thing that he would be very excellent in the future. He is asked to join all sorts of the study classes and exerted pressure, the problem youth are getting more and more in the society. Some of them are self-centered and not to get along with his parents. They think that the parents' requirement is excessive and take their love for granted. They are looked as only a child in family, no one listens to him and accepts his opinions. In fact, the only children is very lonely. They are not willing to communicate with others, even their parents. The parents are always blame them.
If the family has two kids, these problems can be decreased little by little. When they are growing up, they care for each other, such as in their studying, talking about mood and sharing pleasure and so on. At the same time, the troubles what they will face are getting much more when they get into the society. In general, they parents neglect these problems except their learning. The two kids can pour out their real intentions or solute these questions together. They can learn to care for others and understand each other. Don't you pay close attention to the table which we usual is square? It is just designed for four people.

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Nowadays, China practices" One-child-only Policy (I added hyphens between the words)". Do you think it's an ideal family structure?
I don't think it is an ideal family structure (in sentences with "I think", usually we add the negation before "think", not in the clause). In my opinion, it would be an ideal family structure if the family could have two children. (or say "A family with two children should be considered as an ideal family structure")
Today, most of the kids are the only-child at home, so the parents dote on their kid very much, and try their best to provide him with all they can offer. Meanwhile, the parents show their expection on their child, and hope that he would be very excellent in the future. He is asked to join all sorts of study (I deleted "the")classes and exerted pressure, the youth problem are getting more and more serious in the society. Some of them are self-centered and do not get along with their parents. They think that the parents' requirements are excessive and take their love for granted. They are looked on as only a child in family, no one listen (usually after "no one" and "none", we use the plural formof verb) to them and accept their opinions. In fact, the only child is very lonely. They are not willing to communicate with others, even their parents. The parents always blame them.
If the family has two kids, these problems can be decreased little by little. When they are grown up, they care for each other in more circumustances, such as in their study, in talking about mood and sharing pleasure, and so on. At the same time, the troubles they will face (i removed "what", here we should use "that" instead of "what", and "that" can be omitted) are getting much more when they get into the society. In general, they parents neglect these problems except for their studies. The two kids can pursuit their real intentions or solute these questions together. They can learn to care for others and understand each other. Haven't you noticed that the table we use is square? It is just designed for four persons. (when you want to count the number of people, use "person", have you noticed that in the lifts, people write "this lift is for 4 (or more) persons"?)

A suggestions:
When you want to mean 现在/如今, there are lots of expressions that you can use, such as "today", "now", "at present", "these days", etc. not just "nowadays", it's too formal.

为啥错误还是那么多呢?是不是俺太不用心了呢?55555555555555~~~~~好伤心啊
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